My charecter profile - updated

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With a few days of void to fill (all because I got the game from D2D instead of box retail :( ) I decided to redo my main character's profile after having actually played the game and deciding what I liked and what I didn't.


http://www.my-champions.com/character.php?id=223


Feel free to critique and comment, I'm still working on the ideas for his nemesis. Odds are they will be another kind of beastman, perhaps an extremist group of beastmen trying to overthrow humanity or some similar crazy crap.


I'm still fairly interested in any kind of in-game RPing super group, casual or even strict, that might exist in the future so if you have any plans in starting one then feel free to PM me if you'd like me involved.

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Cool story. Original concept. Good looking character (hell he looks intimidating, the way he should look). Overall good story.

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I liked your origin story, although I would have liked to know a little bit more about Lycos's initial interactions with human heroes, since the only humans he had known (as far as I can tell) up until that point had tried to imprison and experiment on him. Maybe throw some conflict in there for added flavor? :confused:

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Thanks for taking the time, guys. I really do appreciate the interest. And thank you Snipe, I spent a good long time in the costume creator trying to ensure exactly that!

He might under go a few more tweaks before release. After reading up about just how exactly super stats work, odds are I'll change his super stats from being Str/Con as the Powers section of his profile would suggest and maybe switch it to Str/Dex. This might make a bit more scene thematically since his travel powers are going to be first: Acro and second: SS.

That and if I gave my guy regen AND massive Con like I was planning to, then unless they've finally fixed those imba passives my character would have probably NEVER died in PvP, lord knows he barely ever did in the betas. But this isn't the place for such balancing discussions is it?

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My instant impression: wicked design on the chest.

Something else I noticed. Many of your paragraphs begin with the same letter that the one before it does.

1. However, unlike

2. He values

1. Lyco was

2. Lyco was

1. It was there

2. It seemed

3.It was in

1. As a beastman

2. Along with

Your actual words and writing work fine, but remember that a story is not like poetry and putting the same letter before every sentence beginning a paragraph tends to influence the same sounds or structure.

If you use other words and letters to begin your paragraphs it mentally forces you to write more inspiring sentences and influencial pieces.

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Something else I noticed. Many of your paragraphs begin with the same letter that the one before it does.



Wow, I absolutely would have never noticed or even considered that. When i get around to slapping on that final layer of polish I will definitely get around to mixing it up a little. Thanks for the tip.